It was another great collab, however...
So I liked what we had here, Loved the arguments among the star Fox team. But this is a N64 Collab and NO ONE did Goledeneye! Or Perfect Dark. Goldeneye was N64, it was one of the best games of it's time, it's still one of the best games around today! Why did no one do it?
Hey, here's something new. =P
I would usually rate this material as quite mediocre, but I feel compelled to give it higher ratings because of its originality, in the end the plot is the most important thing, and that is pretty original.
The animation and graphics are good. But all that's missing here is a little more flow. I found it a little hard to get into; I'm still not exactly sure what was going on exactly even though I understand the background. Unless the narrative is supposed to be shady, I think what is needed here is something to fill in the gaps between speech. Be it ambient environment sounds, movement / actions, or facial expressions. I think that this has the potential to be even better.
Oh and by the way, VOICE ACTORS, some of you have some acoustics in your recording rooms, and it really spoils the atmosphere when someone talks outside, and it sounds like their indoors. So I recommend finding a way to record outside or in a more sound-proofed room.
Thanks for the review =) Storytelling and pacing is something I'm still trying to get down pat, so understandable. I would drag my laptop outside and record but my mic's pretty old/cheap and I have to doctor alot of the acting at least for myself (I play the big black guy), so wind and stuff would probably end up being taken out. However, during all the outside scenes I did add background ambiance as much as possible, but I'll keep working on that.
This dissapointed me...
When I saw the intro I was really expecting something a lot better. The old cartoon intro style was very promising, but the actual cartoon itself was shorter than the intro and all in all a bit mundane. I understand the idea here but it needs a lot more work on it.
Your animation and drawing skills are brilliant! You showed me that you're capable of something great but the story in this just got a "Is that it?" from me. Don't let your skills go to waste, make a longer animation with more than just one joke and then you'll be complimenting your skills!
Thanks for the kind words. I'm not trying to be mean but if you read the description, it would have saved you the time. I've been getting that it's short since it's been up and this was only a portfolio piece. Thank you and next time I should have an actual full cartoon up.
This is helpful.
It's simple and easy to keep track of. Now that I know the basics I could probably make an animated one already, but you're gonna have to teach me and others how to make it stop being animated when stationary.
I look forward to your next step. :)
Alright, I can see the foundations developing here
Here are some things I'd like you to make in the full version.
1- Skybox, Where ever I look the sun is always in the centre of the sky.
2- More detailed terrain. If you can't manage to make hills or anything, work on some textures.
3- More road, this kinda fits into the terrain section.
4- another in simmilar workign to terrain - Object such as buildings and trees.
5- The hardest one: Improved physics. When I let go of the up arrow button the car stops instantly. Try to develop a code that will allow it to accelerate and decelerate smoothly.
If you master all of this in your oncomming game then it should be front page material. You've obviously figured out how to make a 3d level. Perhaps a 3d car as well.
I'm not saying that this will be easy. I'm just reccomending it. Good luck.
Simple but much fun.
It was a very simple game but your animation, music and graphics made it front page material. Keep it up. :D
Tha's something different
Although YOU didn't make any of the effects, it's good that you included them. It really does make it a lot more immersive.
Voice acting itself was once again great. Keep it up. =)
I appreciate you taking the time to stop by mastermalpass------>
I know you're busy with school, life, your brother, driving and all that jazz. Your review means alot to me and I can't thank you enough for leaving words and a 10 here for me.
I have to give all credit to Bad-Man-Inc for the effects AND artistic presentation.
All I did was, say the words he sent to me via e-mail. I hope to hear from you soon, Man.
Update me on what's been going on with you. How'd that class go? Vroom, vroom. . .
..........Take care, be good and let this girl know how life's goin' for ya.period
5 completely different voices by one person. You gone into any flash projects yet? Because this skill really can go to some use.
I haven't YET, mastermalpass------>
Y--E--T being the KEY word.
There HAVE been a few ideas tossed around though. Which is aMAZing in itself to me. It ALmost makes me wish I had known about Newgrounds aLONG time ago. I'm really looking forward to working with anyone and everyone who is ready AND willing to put up with a chatty schitzophrenic chick.
Thanks for the compliment, mastermalpass. I hope there ARE aLOT of,
submissions-to-be, just waiting to be expressed from the depths of My procrastiNATION.
..........Take care, be good and watch where you park your TANK.period
A true masterpiece.
My favorite sonic 2 song from my favorite sonic2 level. This is a very well made song, just like it's taken from the game it's self. Very well put together and it's got a great beat. 10/10 isn't enough for this song, but it's all I can give :D
Shading is perfect, as are the proportions, posture and lighting. I actually like the sketchy look to it, and the cloud/fog effect is really well done! Keep it coming.
It's a heavy! =O
Nice work, damn did you do this with a felt pen? I'm guessing because the colour gets stronger where the brush strokes overlap (I'm such a graphic nerd). But yeah, that's impressive, because whether or not it's a felt pen, I've never found it easy to make a good pic out of felt pens.
Keep it up! =D
it's "Copic MArker"
that type of marker is sooooo good.
whole new type of world
This is good work with Pen and ink. I love the comic-book style, and how some of the picture leaks out of the frame (one of the best conventions of comics). However like J-qb said in your thread, it's difficult to distinguish the different shapes.
This is something I've struggled with myself - you can see evidence of that in one of my pen drawings. My advice to you is (I've recently tried this and it works perfectly) use thiner lines and lighter shading in the distance, then thicker lines and more dense shading in the foreground. This helps set up the perspective. In real life, we notice that he further something gets away, the less detail we see.
Give it a try, I look forward to how your art progresses. =)
will do : )
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